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The day the leopards died by *neonxaos:iconneonxaos:



Alarm clock - check!
The city humdrum - check!
The noisy guy upstairs - check!
The sound of running water - check!
The angry woman on the phone - check!
The furtive cat legions, stray, spoiled - check!
The wars on TV, clamorous, onerous, futile - check!
The shadowy stalkers returning to their hideouts - check!
The mother, worrying about offspring whereabouts - check!
The birds - a farrago of doves, gulls, sparrows, crows - check!
The dogs - spaniels, Great Danes, retrievers, pomeranians - check!
The plumber, wanting money for that job he never completed - check!

The bugs, the critters, the noises behind the walls, the eyes in your kitchen sink -

Check, check, check!

Everything accounted for, I look outside and find no leopards.
You would think that this was natural. This is not
leopard country, but I feel their absence elsewhere, and
I wonder why all the city eyes look inward.

So I walk.

I cut into the sunshine
and sail the concrete waves into
the green - no leopards, into
the blue - no leopards, into
the black;
but everything
is leopardless.

I turn around and go to every continent
because I can.
But all the leopards are gone.
I pick up every newspaper
because I can!
But all the leopards are gone.
I decide to save the entire world
but I can't.
All the leopards are gone,
and everyone is busy
being noisily silent about
how they could not care less.
©2008-2009 *neonxaos
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Author's Comments

Full title:

"The day that all the leopards died in front of blind and busy eyes"

I am experimenting with some more straightforward pieces at the moment, because the ones about the Universe exploding hurt my head and kept me awake at night :)

Daily Deviation

Given 2009-09-06

Where the hell are the leopards?! Perhaps The day that all the leopards died in front of blind and busy eyes by *neonxaos holds the answer. (Featured by ^fllnthblnk)

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:iconbblk:
This is beautiful...

One of my favourites of yours. :heart:


I love the title. And sorry I didn't offer critique.
:iconneonxaos:
Thank you!

dA NEEDS to expand the character limit for titles!

Critique is not mandatory, only encouraged :D

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:iconqueenhrosie:
This poem is fucking amazing.

* :heart: *

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I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones
:iconneonxaos:
That is fucking good to hear! :D

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:iconbblk:
I KNOW! It's so irritating. I usually don't do long titles, but for one of my recent pieces I wanted to, but couldn't. They really need to.

:glomp:
:iconottersandsky:
i like the use of exclamation marks. it gives this poem a sort of wild, verging-on-madness feeling. psychadelic, almost. i've heard someone say that exclamation marks shouldn't be used in poetry but i think that's complete rubbish - look how well it fits here! the stanza starting with "i cut into the sunshine" is probably my favourite bit, but there are heaps of brilliant lines, especially in that first stanza. "The furtive cat legions, stray, spoiled - check!"

i love it! :D
:iconneonxaos:
Glad to hear it.

I've heard the line about exclamation marks in poetry many times before too, and I never understood it. I use them a lot. I definitely think they work well, if placed carefully.

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:iconottersandsky:
yep, it's all in the placement, for sure.
:iconyouinventedme:
"it was the most I ever threw up
and it changed my life forever"


xo!

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:iconneonxaos:
This confuses me.

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